Tuesday, August 16, 2011

Is this a good starter for my book?

The paragraphs are pretty good, grammar needs some help, but the sentences/paragraphs don't flow. It sounds to me like this person is waking up in the middle of the road. If he/she's in her house, describe that in another paragraph. If he/she's in an alleyway, say that. It's just a bit confusing the way it is now.

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